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Badger Paul
07-06-2007, 11:20 AM
Ron Paul needs a good speech writer The speech he made in Iowa was fine for his hardcore supporters to listen too, it was good for the well of the House or would have been fine for a Von Mises Institute dinner. But for a large venue, probably the largest Rep. Paul has spoken too all year I think, Iím not sure how well it went over to just the average voter watching on the tube or in the hall. He spoke extempt style as he is wont to. He made good points and was especially strong ones in the foreign policy parts of it that got the crowd going. But when he talks monetary policy it was like being in a classroom or being with a few academics. The tangents you can go off on when talking such esoterics are endless and he still has that sort of goofy, ld uncle quality to him thatís nice but may not convince people heís serious about being president. When youíve got an army ready to march for you youíve got to fire them up not ramble about the Federal Reserve. Thereís a time and a place for such talks like to economists or intellectuals, not to a campaign rally.

This is important because if RP is going to become president heís going to have to make some big speeches to big audiences and heís going to have to change his style to do so. Now Iím not suggesting he speak with fire and brimstone because he would look silly. Itís got to be a style heís comfortable with and can articulate well with. Heís not a great public speaker because heís not had to be, but he can get better if he has a good speech writer who can fit a style to the candidate and reach the votersí emotions. Like it or not, emotions are what move voters and RP is going have to capture those emotions and speak in a style that shows him at his friendly best but also shows a seriousness to him. If he gives the speech he made in Des Moines to the audience in Ames (which he really canít because the candidates are only allotted 15-20 minuets for speeches at the straw poll), which will be in front of 15,000 people instead of 1,000, most of them will be outside in the halls instead of being in the arena other than his supporters.

So I've taken the liberty to writing a speech RP can say during the Iowa Straw Poll. I hope you like it:

Ron Paul Speech to Ames Iowa Straw Poll


The state of Iowa has a great motto: ďOur liberties we prize and our rights we will maintain.Ē Itís this motto that at is the heart of my campaign for President and one I hope all of us in this arena share.

Because when I am President ladies and gentlemen, we will prize our liberties and maintain our rights by abolishing the instruments of government that currently threaten those liberties and our rights.

We will prize our liberties and maintain our rights by abolishing the Federal Reserve Board, the IRS, the income tax, the inflation tax and all those entities of government that are unconstitutional.

We will prize our liberties and maintain our rights by revoking the Patriot Act, REAL ID, No Child Left Behind and other laws that are also outside the bounds of our constitution or rushed through Congress without proper debate or proper time and consideration that is demanded of us as elected representatives of the people of this great country.

We will prize our liberties and maintain our rights by restoring the rule of law and accountability for our public officials. We will restore habeous corpus, abolish military tribunals and close down the prison at Guantanamo Bay.

We will prize our liberties and maintain our rights by ending the so-called War on Drugs, the taking of private property for the enrichment of the few and the powerful and other attacks upon the life, property and civil liberties of our citizens.

We will prize our liberties and maintain our rights by restoring power to our state governments and local communities so that a government of our friends and neighbors replaces a government of distant few, the distant rich and the distant powerful.

And we will prize our liberties and maintain our rights by liberating our economy and our foreign policy from control of the special interests, control of Middle Eastern oil and Middle Eastern dictators and the control of criminal ideologues who have driven us into a disastrous conflict in Iraq that has needlessly cost the lives of thousands of brave men and women.

Some of those lives lost have come from this great state of Iowa. Many have come from small towns and farms all over this country. For too long the powers that be have wasted the lives of the young, the brave, the talented and the inspirational from our rural areas. They have taken away the best and the brightest from our small towns not to defend our soil but to police the world. They wasted them as cannon fodder for their sinister plans of empire and control of free markets and control of others without their consent. They have wasted them in their utopian dreams and mad schemes that only masked their desires for power.

For too long rural America has had to bare the burden of empire and war. The fallen have returned home to funerals, the wounded return home broken in body and spirit while the rest of country goes on with business as usual without any thought of the war and its consequences. The media and the powers that be hide that reality behind the images of celebrities and materialism and tell you thatís what important, not the fact that brave Americans are dying for reasons that turned out to be lies. Or that they died because they were not adequately prepared, or because they were not adequately equipped or because they were put into the middle of religious war that has nothing to do with our struggle against Al Qaeda or our national interest.

Well I say enough! When I become President, I can say to you, the fathers and mothers of America, that you need not worry for the safety of your sons and daughters anymore. Because they, are coming home.

Some will hear this speech today and say that I am a radical. That I am not a ďreal Republican in their mistaken eyes, their mistaken ears and mistaken minds. But I say to you that these words are nothing new. They have been spoken by Republicans time and time again throughout our partyís history. They were spoken by Robert LaFollette as Democrats tried to silence his opposition to World War I. They were spoken by Henry Cabot Lodge as he led the opposition in the Senate against one-world internationalism of Woodrow Wilson. They were spoken by Robert Taft, Mr. Republican himself. They were spoken by the great Dwight Eisenhower as he brought the Korean War to an end. They were spoken by Richard Nixon as he brought the Vietnam War to an end. They were spoken by great Iowa Republicans like H.R. Gross and Burke Hickenlooper as they fought against government waste, the military-industrial complex and the Vietnam War. And they were spoken by the beloved Ronald Reagan as he pulled U.S. troops out the quagmire of Lebanon and brought us to victory in the Cold War not through open conflict, but with peace through strength.

We Republicans must face up to the fact that we have lost our way and lost what we hold dear to ourselves. But we can easily find our way back to the White House and back to control of Congress if we allow the Republican Party of history and tradition to live and breathe and jump again. I say to you that the energy that has been a part of my campaign since its start earlier this year, the energy and enthusiasm of thousands of people all across this country from every kind of background, every kind of age, every kind of place and every kind of faith, can be the energy of a restored Republican Party. Together we can make whatís old new again and together we can take back our party from those who have led us astray.

Today, I ask you all to be part of the excitement, be a part of the legacy and be a part of the fun of making the Republican Party become itself again. Thank you all very much and God Bless each and every one of you!

JS4Pat
07-06-2007, 12:03 PM
That is EXCELLENT!

If Ron doesn't use it - then the supporters in Iowa need to change it to third peson and use it. :)

Badger Paul
07-06-2007, 12:18 PM
I appreciate the compliments. Please email it to headquarters for them to take a look at it.

Lark
07-21-2007, 11:09 PM
Well done!

http://DallasForRonPaul.org

I'm sure the current thinking is to appeal to Republicans primarily at first... but I feel a certain unifying slant might convince the party faithful that the same-o, same-o ain't gonna work this time around.

Neo-con-artist groupthink has lost its charm for even a lot of Republicans... so you'd think they might want someone to run in the general election who can get elected.

USPatriot36
07-22-2007, 01:52 AM
I agree that Ron Paul has room for improvement on the speech writing. I personally thought your speech wasn't an improvement. The first points came off like talking points. Most people will not jump bandwagon of those talking points without a much better explanation of why and how. The middle part about iowan's is pretty good except for the label 'sinister' which is too close to name calling.

There is some merit to the stuff at the end except for the Great Eisenhower part. Eisenhower was a Democrat his entire life up until he ran as the Republican President. America wanted to roll back all the big government fostered upon us 16 years of Roosevelt/Truman but he instead legitimized it by leaving it in place.

Kuldebar
07-22-2007, 10:34 AM
Well, I'll take real time, unscripted, unpolished and unvarnished speech over managed delivery, bubble wrapped, politically filtered speech any day.

In fact, I think the fact that Paul isn't "managed" is one reason why people realize they can trust him.

Don't legitimize modern politics by saying we need Paul to become more like what we already have.

And we wonder why we have people that value image over substance, lies over the truth, promise of security over the contest of freedom?


Don't get me wrong, speech writing has it's place but it is the toe in the door for what a lot of the crap we have today in politics...I think a candidate should speak from the heart in his or her own words and not someone else's.

I am old fashioned, I think the person giving the speech should also be the one who writes it.

Omnis
08-08-2007, 03:51 PM
I agree that Ron Paul has room for improvement on the speech writing. I personally thought your speech wasn't an improvement. The first points came off like talking points. Most people will not jump bandwagon of those talking points without a much better explanation of why and how. The middle part about iowan's is pretty good except for the label 'sinister' which is too close to name calling.

There is some merit to the stuff at the end except for the Great Eisenhower part. Eisenhower was a Democrat his entire life up until he ran as the Republican President. America wanted to roll back all the big government fostered upon us 16 years of Roosevelt/Truman but he instead legitimized it by leaving it in place.

Agreed.

Ron is an excellent writer. I have no doubt that he will continue to use his pen, the most powerful WMD (weapon of mass dissent), to craft a show-stopping presentation.

ghemminger
08-08-2007, 04:18 PM
Sending to HQ:) unless someone let's me know in 5 minutes not to!

McDermit
08-08-2007, 05:46 PM
No offense, but I'm not a fan of it.

"It’s this motto that at is the heart of my campaign"

And the "We will prize our liberties and maintain" thing would have either annoyed or bored me to the point that I stopped listening 2 lines in.

McDermit
08-08-2007, 05:46 PM
I like RP's natural flow. He's one of the more exciting speakers, imo.

TexMac
08-08-2007, 05:50 PM
Sending to HQ:) unless someone let's me know in 5 minutes not to!
You can send it, but RP won't use it. He is who he is.

Omnis
08-08-2007, 07:20 PM
Yeah, I too would rather he not. No offense.

Badger Paul
08-08-2007, 08:21 PM
Thanks for the critques everyone. All I will say is that this is a speech designed for a 20-minute block of time in front of 15,000 people. He's got to say something that goes the gut and get at the heart of his camapaign and appeal to Iowa voters and I feel I've written a speech that covers all those bases. It's Ron Paul's style that is his appeal along with his words. But has to give a speech that is concise and tight in the limited amount of time he has. Otherwise he'll bomb.

Badger Paul
08-08-2007, 08:22 PM
Thanks for emailing this to HQ.

GeorgThomas
08-14-2007, 08:50 AM
Dear Badger,

I respectfully disagree with you. Ron Paul is a perfect speaker and an excellent writer. I say this almost with regret, as I am a professional speech writer. It would be a dream for me to write for Ron Paul. However, his style happens to be uniquely superb - bright, clear, conclusive, intelligible, totally honest, totally genuine - his presentations appeal equally to the mind and the heart.

What hard thinking of their own his listeners might still have to do cannot be "alleviated" by speech doctoring - there are issues that everyone has to take the trouble to figure out in his or her own way.

Very importantly: with Ron Paul you witness a man who has spent a life putting the utmost effort into being honest and as close to the truth as a man can get. These accumulated efforts show with every word he utters - do not touch that treasure, and while it is perfectible (as every human endeavour), there is only one person who can achieve even further improvement: Ron Paul himself.

Best regards

GeorgThomas