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RonPaulAdContest
12-14-2007, 10:16 PM
Hi All,

First draft, still very rough, of a newspaper ad I'm running next week in central Wisconsin.

This image is a collage from this morning's blimp launch, along with the bottom of the RP USA today grassroots ad. Like that ad, the final draft will be freely available.

My plan is to replace the black Tea Party section with a description of the image, something like "Many thousands nationwide rallied in support of a Ron Paul blimp as it first set sail, etc". Then, naturally, I'll need to clean up the bullets and borders etc.

I'm interested in any feedback or help this great community has to offer!

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2303/2112187482_3f944207ec_o_d.jpg

--Raw image credit to 'madwurm' on Flickr.

-T

B of R guy
12-14-2007, 10:20 PM
I like this, BUT the guy on the horse needs to be CHARGING!

Leslie Webb
12-14-2007, 10:29 PM
Fantastic!

torchbearer
12-14-2007, 10:32 PM
I would keep it simple. In my opinion...
I would cut off all the info at the bottom, keep the quote, add the website and phone number for the official campaign.

if people are intrigued by the photo, they will visit the website...

torchbearer
12-14-2007, 10:33 PM
blimp pays dividends.. I love me some dividends.

tamor
12-14-2007, 10:35 PM
Great Ad- Love the picture

AircooledVW
12-14-2007, 11:28 PM
Im Mclovin it! Only thing that i would change as torchbearer stated would be to simplify the bottom portion. A picture is worth a thousand words and i think this pic shows that. Keep with the simple theme up top and just have a little info on the bottom. I think that would get a better reaction. Thanks for all you do! Its so refreshing to see all the excitement about a candidate that actually deserves it!

lucius
12-14-2007, 11:29 PM
Well done!

wohoo
12-14-2007, 11:39 PM
I never noticed the american flag on the blimps tail from the pics before. That's a nice little touch.

Rhys
12-15-2007, 03:44 PM
That's a really cool ad.

My feedback would be to clean up the text area. I wouldn't decorate it at all because the image is so strong and the text should be very concise and equally strong. The text and white space should also be a little more balanced. I'd use a nice type layout inside a plain box instead of a graphic box. Also use three or five columns. You shouldn't use even numbers.... it's just a thing.

Last, Dec. 16 is tomorrow. If you run the ad next week... :)

Dave Pedersen
12-15-2007, 03:52 PM
Very cool..

I would change it to "active duty military" rather than "active military".

The Tea Party will be over before your ad is circulated. You could use that space for a Wisconsin Primary date push.

Great Work ! Thank You !

ronpaulblogsdotcom
12-15-2007, 05:09 PM
Looks good but can you promote the Tea Party? It is one day away. Newspapers are not usually very fast.

The text on the bottom seems smashed. Is that a "Narrow" text? I would not use narrow. Shorten the longer sentences or remove them. Then get some more white space down there. The bottom seems too busy.

Change the font on all 3 sections of the bottom to something Sans serif like Arial Helvetica or Tehoma.

Looks nice.

RonPaulAdContest
12-16-2007, 08:56 PM
Thanks for the great feedback! We used many of your ideas. Here is what we are taking to the paper for publication this week (12/18). Please post comments to this thread in the Blimp area.

http://www.ronpaulforums.com/showthread.php?p=631264&posted=1#post631264

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2221/2116916764_906e28142b_b.jpg