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Trassin
09-30-2007, 05:20 AM
How does this sound for a quick submission to my local paper's comments section?


I just want to thank all the Ron Paul supporters in the area who helped the campaign to raise $1,000,000 in just five days. The mass media can deny the ground swell of support that is rising across the country for Dr. Paul all they want, come primary time our voices will be heard.

Should I change it to

"...come time for the primaries our..."

ConstitutionGal
09-30-2007, 05:29 AM
I'd make the change. It 'reads' better with your second option.:)

Trassin
09-30-2007, 05:35 AM
K, thx.

TooConservative
09-30-2007, 06:08 AM
Nice