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LudwigVan Kubrick
02-03-2008, 09:20 PM
Wrote and recorded it myself this weekend.

Thoughts? What should I do with this if anything?

http://www.myspace.com/goatgreengoat

Song called "Apathy (Run, Ron Run)"
Crickett
02-03-2008, 09:35 PM
Wow. Love your voice and loved the chorus, but I will make a few critiques. I think the beat needs to be just a little bit faster, as it drags just a bit, and, especially the last two verses could be a bit better stated. I really like a LOT about the song tho..love the tune and the harmony as well.
LudwigVan Kubrick
02-03-2008, 09:37 PM
Wow. Love your voice and loved the chorus, but I will make a few critiques. I think the beat needs to be just a little bit faster, as it drags just a bit, and, especially the last two verses could be a bit better stated. I really like a LOT about the song tho..love the tune and the harmony as well.

Thanks for the tips... It is my first draft so all feedback is appreciated. :)
LudwigVan Kubrick
02-03-2008, 10:01 PM
i know how fast things roll down here so permit me a bump :)
Crickett
02-03-2008, 10:59 PM
I will rebump this, too..great work here..
LudwigVan Kubrick
02-04-2008, 08:20 AM
I will rebump this, too..great work here..

Thank you. Lyrics are on the site too, but I'll post them here when I get home.
FreeTraveler
02-04-2008, 08:26 AM
bump for cool song. I want to hear it a bit faster too. Also, you could enuncian Run, Ron Run a little more clearly in some places.
theprolific
02-04-2008, 08:28 AM
that's a great Ron Paul song!
virginiakid
02-04-2008, 08:35 AM
Enjoyed the song, very well put together, you voice was really good and it had a great feel to it. Awesome!
sirachman
02-04-2008, 09:06 AM
great song! got it on my ipod now!
LudwigVan Kubrick
02-04-2008, 09:25 AM
bump for cool song. I want to hear it a bit faster too. Also, you could enuncian Run, Ron Run a little more clearly in some places.

That is actually the "muddying" effect from uploading the mp3 to MySpace. The .wav file is much clearer. Thanks for the critique though..much appreciated. :)

Still thinking about deleting the last verse, as it runs almost 5 minutes.
LudwigVan Kubrick
02-04-2008, 08:34 PM
Promised the lyrics so...

Apathy (Run Ron Run)

I opened the door and cured my apathy
It was like a disease, it was feeding on me
I couldn't believe what I had seen
Started to read, turned off the TV

Run Ron Run

I opened the door and cured my apathy
I was fast asleep like the rest of the sheep
Then I found out the Fed's doing the feeding
Four months pay a year is all they'll be needing

Run Ron Run

The lemming, the parrot, and the dangling parrot of democracy
is all filtered through the monetary elite
It's all right there if anyone cared to see
All that we hear and we see can be traced back to six companies

Run Ron Run

Now here I am and I had always believed
In focus groups and pie charts on TV
But the framing, the branding, censorship landing on you and me
I was I could say it went only as far as the GOP

Run Ron Run

I think I might edit out the last verse. Would make it a little over 3 minutes instead of 5.