View Full Version : I want to Give Kudos
Lord Xar
08-02-2007, 08:16 PM
Just wanted to say.. KUDOS to.......................
Freelancer, Scribbler and LibertyEagle for giving me a huge hand with the script copy... we were jamming at the 11th hour to get something together... and we bounced alot of things off of each other... in addition to donating..
so, officially as we move into other areas.. don't worry, we have a good crew scripting some cool things....
I just wanted to give some props to them for really dealing with a TON of back and forth and everyone working together..
Second Kudos go to.............
YOU
for your donations --- many of you, and I mean ALOT! came thru and enabled us to represent as best we could.
third kudos go to..............
a guy named "NEIL" -- he is a graphic guy and again, a very patient person who dealt with my continuous back/forth, and he was able to create an awesome newspaper ad -- very talented guy....
Syren123
08-02-2007, 08:23 PM
You guys own.
foofighter20x
08-02-2007, 08:39 PM
Lord Xar,
I got you some mad props on the DailyPaul!
http://www.dailypaul.com/node/1071
RPatTheBeach
08-02-2007, 08:45 PM
Awesome work! My only dislike is when he says "End birthright citizenship" ... to me it sounded like "AND birthright citizenship", as a continuation of the previous sentence... which didn't make sense.
Just my $0.02. Great effort overall!
LibertyEagle
08-02-2007, 08:45 PM
LOL. Except it's 60 seconds.
Birdlady
08-02-2007, 08:46 PM
Awesome work! My only dislike is when he says "End birthright citizenship" ... to me it sounded like "AND birthright citizenship", as a continuation of the previous sentence... which didn't make sense.
Just my $0.02. Great effort overall!
I thought the same thing...
LibertyEagle
08-02-2007, 08:47 PM
Oh well. Xar even had that part recorded again so the guy would bump up the word, END.
foofighter20x
08-02-2007, 08:47 PM
Awesome work! My only dislike is when he says "End birthright citizenship" ... to me it sounded like "AND birthright citizenship", as a continuation of the previous sentence... which didn't make sense.
Just my $0.02. Great effort overall!
I thought the same thing...
Glad to know I wasn't alone when I told Xar-y that...
Lord Xar
08-02-2007, 08:49 PM
Lord Xar,
I got you some mad props on the DailyPaul!
http://www.dailypaul.com/node/1071
oh, cool.. thanks....
Lord Xar
08-02-2007, 08:51 PM
Glad to know I wasn't alone when I told Xar-y that...
hahahahah... I thought it was fixed..!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
its obvious though "what" the intent is, right?
Its a loud "end" to me....you guys are crazy.!!!
I hope I didn't send out the wrong ad!! DOH!!!!!!!!
foofighter20x
08-02-2007, 08:53 PM
This is why I said to put a full-stop and "He'll" before that.
No gramatically mistaking the word then. :p
Lord Xar
08-02-2007, 08:55 PM
well, next time it will be perfect.. it was already recorded, so it was a matter of trying to bring "end" up in the mix... you do admit it was better than that "first" version I let you here, right?
nullvalu
08-02-2007, 08:55 PM
i thought that too about the "end" birthright citizenship.. my heart stopped for a split second thinking someone messed up but then realized i just heard wrong..
foofighter20x
08-02-2007, 08:58 PM
well, next time it will be perfect.. it was already recorded, so it was a matter of trying to bring "end" up in the mix... you do admit it was better than that "first" version I let you here, right?
Yes. End stood out to me more clearly in the final, but then I have to admit, I was listening specifically for that spot.
As you can see, however, others that weren't listening specifically mistook what they heard.
Lord Xar
08-02-2007, 08:59 PM
c'mon, you guys are killing me.. hahahha.... to me its very obvious.. "END" ...
Lord Xar
08-02-2007, 09:00 PM
Yes. End stood out to me more clearly in the final, but then I have to admit, I was listening specifically for that spot.
As you can see, however, others that weren't listening specifically mistook what they heard.
wait.. mistook in a good way....? or bad way?
nullvalu
08-02-2007, 09:02 PM
Xar.. In a bad way.. Sorry! Don't be upset you did a really great job with the whole thing, there just should have been a longer pause or something.. No worries, cuz the next sentence made it make sense.
Lord Xar
08-02-2007, 09:06 PM
I thought it was fixed enough so it would be an easy understanding....
........... (where is my friggin gun...)
Larofeticus
08-02-2007, 09:08 PM
That sounded really really good.
But what about the text saying it's a 30 second ad when the mp3 was 60 seconds long?
and there is a problem with your link to it; the bold close tag is nested in the wrong spot
RPatTheBeach
08-02-2007, 09:10 PM
No gun, man. We need your good work!
After listening a second time, it clearly says "end".
LibertyEagle
08-02-2007, 09:10 PM
Xar, no one could possibly have misunderstood, when they heard the complete blurb on illegal immigration. Just like we did, these guys are going through the "second guess" stage. The ad was good. It was pretty darn good, in fact.
We can address the "end" on the next go round.
What you pulled off, Xar, was just short of a miracle. Pat yourself on the back, my friend.
JoshLowry
08-02-2007, 09:14 PM
Kudos to all of you...!
nullvalu
08-02-2007, 09:14 PM
What you pulled off, Xar, was just short of a miracle. Pat yourself on the back, my friend.
Agreed, it really was so good maybe we're nitpicking.
foofighter20x
08-02-2007, 09:18 PM
Agreed, it really was so good maybe we're nitpicking.
It is a little nitpick-ish, but...
first impressions mean a lot!
And that radio spot is probably our first handshake with a lot of Iowans.
RPatTheBeach
08-02-2007, 09:21 PM
We can address the "end" on the next go round.
Actually, it may be better to leave it as is. People may hear it wrongly and say to themselves "that can't be right.. i'll have to listen more closely next time" ... and when the ad plays again, they have more attention to the message (??? maybe?)
LibertyEagle
08-02-2007, 09:21 PM
So, what do you want us to do, foofighter? Pull the rest of them and pay to redo it?
nullvalu
08-02-2007, 09:23 PM
No, i think what RPatTheBeach said may be right
foofighter20x
08-02-2007, 09:23 PM
So, what do you want us to do, foofighter? Pull the rest of them and pay to redo it?
Did I say we should?
No.
So quit jumpin' my case, bro. :p
What's done is done.
It's just something to keep in mind for the next round is all.
I heard it on the radio here and it never entered my mind that it said anything but END. No problem!
LibertyEagle
08-02-2007, 09:26 PM
It is a little nitpick-ish, but...
first impressions mean a lot!
And that radio spot is probably our first handshake with a lot of Iowans.
Sorry Foo... this sounded like it to me. I think I need to get some sleep. ;)
micahnelson
08-02-2007, 09:28 PM
Omg Ron Paul Is Going To And Birthright Citizenship! We must bring this madness to an And!
Badger Paul
08-02-2007, 09:29 PM
For your leadership, help and drive to get this done.
We didn't wait, we didn't whine. We didn't worry. We acted.
Give yourself a big pat on the pack!
Shatterhand
08-02-2007, 09:39 PM
Thank you, Lord Xar! And a big thank you to everyone else who helped and donated. I just listened to it. I thought it was amazing! Wow, I just got re-energized about Iowa. Let's take Dr. Paul to the top.
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Lord Xar
08-02-2007, 09:42 PM
Omg Ron Paul Is Going To And Birthright Citizenship! We must bring this madness to an And!
hahahahhaa..
the guy said "END" but he read it too fast... hahaha.. trust me, its 6 of one, half dozen of another.. I think over the airwaves, like david said - its "end.
Avalon
08-02-2007, 09:48 PM
Omg Ron Paul Is Going To And Birthright Citizenship! We must bring this madness to an And!
Listen again...it's very easy to hear "he will defend our own borders and birthright citizenship and welfare to illegal aliens"
but I'll admit, I didn't hear it that way the first time :D
GREAT AD! GREAT WORK!
Dustancostine
08-02-2007, 10:05 PM
Dean,
Who is the voice over guy? He did a great job.
Dustancostine
08-02-2007, 10:08 PM
Listen again...it's very easy to hear "he will defend our own borders and birthright citizenship and welfare to illegal aliens"
but I'll admit, I didn't hear it that way the first time :D
GREAT AD! GREAT WORK!
I have listened 10 times and it sounds like he is saying:
"he will defend our own borders, end birthright citizenship and welfare to illegal aliens"
Ninja Homer
08-02-2007, 10:14 PM
Awesome job!
I also thought it was "and" the first time I heard it. It definitely won't make a difference in the results of the ad though. Hearing one radio ad doesn't normally lead directly to a vote, but it will get people interested in Ron Paul so they do their own research. It may get more people researching him just to see if he's for or against birthright citizenship and welfare for illegal aliens (although that should be obvious).
It might help it sound more like "end" by time-stretching the "n" sound a tiny bit, but then you'd have to adjust time somewhere else to shrink it back to 60 seconds. Personally, I'd leave it as is.
Scribbler de Stebbing
08-02-2007, 10:40 PM
Hey, with any luck, the talk show hosts will hear that and discuss it. "Did Ron Paul just say he would defend our borders AND birthright citizenship and welfare to illegal aliens? How is he going to defend our borders AND birthright citizenship? Caller? You're on the line: . . . Oh, really. Are any of the other candidates talking about anding birthright citizenship? No kidding."
All bow to Lord Xar. We were sitting around on the forums talking about ads, and he went and DID it!
Delaware
08-02-2007, 10:50 PM
When does the newspaper article come out, i want to see it.
Lord Xar
08-03-2007, 12:18 AM
You guys are crazy.. the man said "END" --> but because the sentence was so fast, you think he said and.. hahahha.. its a runon sentence, I admit.. but I sat with the guy and we went thru it piece by piece,,, its END.. but he said it so fast and his infection makes your brain go "huh.." -- but he does say "end"... hahaha... nobody will think that... because right after he goes 'absolutely NO amnesty".... sorta obvious... but who am i to say..
ok.. I just listened to it again.. and I don't know.. to me he says "End".. its very obvious.... you guys are crazy.. nobody will think otherwise.. especially on the air...
.. why I outtaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!
Sounds great to me! What station will this be on, and how many times?
Lord Xar
08-03-2007, 10:49 AM
HEY everyone.. Listen to this version - Is the "end" better?
Is it more OBVIOUS that it is an END, that the first posted one?
http://www.mmashirts.com/ron_paul60sec_final.mp3
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Suzu
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It will run a total of about 29x from thur,fri, mon, tues, wed --> on WHO am, and WOW fm --> both talk radio
DeadheadForPaul
08-03-2007, 10:53 AM
Lord Xar = my hero for the month!
Lord Xar
08-03-2007, 10:54 AM
Lord Xar = my hero for the month!
well? is more Obvious???? hahahha.. I gotta know so I can submit it asap.. if nobody thinks so, I'll leave things as it is...
Devil_rules_in_extremes
08-03-2007, 11:01 AM
That's a great, great radio ad... I'm glad I donated a little money to the effort... You've done a great job Lord XAR...
How many times will this ad be heard on the radio? and how many stations?
Dustancostine
08-03-2007, 11:01 AM
NM
nullvalu
08-03-2007, 11:10 AM
Yes thats better
freelance
08-03-2007, 11:10 AM
It is more obvious, but we can always say "PUT AN END TO" or "STOP" next time.
BIG_J
08-03-2007, 12:32 PM
Lord Xar guide us,
Lord Xar teach us.
Lord Xar protect us.
In your light we thrive.
In your mercy we are sheltered.
In your wisdom we are humbled.
We live only to serve.
Our lives are yours
ThePieSwindler
08-03-2007, 12:39 PM
Wait is there an audio online of the commercial?
sylvania
08-03-2007, 12:41 PM
IMHO, I like newest version.
Lord Xar
08-03-2007, 12:44 PM
IMHO, I like newest version.
NEW AD IN PLACE ALREADY!!! better "end".. you guys drive me crazy!!!! hahahha
RPatTheBeach
08-03-2007, 12:58 PM
HEY everyone.. Listen to this version - Is the "end" better?
Is it more OBVIOUS that it is an END, that the first posted one?
http://www.mmashirts.com/ron_paul60sec_final.mp3
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Suzu
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It will run a total of about 29x from thur,fri, mon, tues, wed --> on WHO am, and WOW fm --> both talk radio
MUCH better!!
Once again, GREAT WORK!!
LibertyEagle
08-03-2007, 01:12 PM
Lord Xar guide us,
Lord Xar teach us.
Lord Xar protect us.
In your light we thrive.
In your mercy we are sheltered.
In your wisdom we are humbled.
We live only to serve.
Our lives are yours
I think I'm going to be sick. :p :D
Can we use it?
It is specific to Iowa though. Hmm…
Lord Xar
08-03-2007, 01:19 PM
Can we use it?
It is specific to Iowa though. Hmm…
that ad is running in iowa right now.. it is AMES specific..
keep updated on this forum.. there will be a big announcement soon in the regard you wish to know -- as noted in your post above....... :-)
When you buy the add is the recording of it included in the price?
Lord Xar
08-03-2007, 01:33 PM
When you buy the add is the recording of it included in the price?
that is probably a thing to ask the radio station.. in my case, I created the ad (of course had help from scribbler, freelancer and libertyeagle) on the script..... but I think "some" do and some don't -- create the ad...
Why don't you get me a script.... of a 60 second spot...
mail to:
ronpaul4america@yahoo.com
Why don't you get me a script.... of a 60 second spot...
I kinda like yours.
I’m in Florida.
The only thing that really would need to be changed is two things.
First it looks like that there is going to be a big Republican shin-dig on Oct.20th and 21st. here in Florida.
This from the Florida GOP web site…
Presidency IV (which is what they are calling the event) will provide opportunities for Florida’s grassroots volunteers to meet with state and local Republican Party leadership, elected officials, other Republicans from throughout the state, and the major Republican Presidential Candidates. Presidency IV will culminate with a live, prime time Presidential Candidate debate broadcast by Fox News Network.
It doesn’t say anything about a straw poll. But I’ve read on a few other web pages where they said that they were thinking about having one, and I can’t imagine that they wouldn’t have one seeing as how this is a huge two day event.
So if they are going to have one, then the part of the script that references the Ames Straw poll would have to reference this event instead. This event is to be held in Orlando, FL.
Second, your script mentions Paul as receiving more donations from military personnel in the last quarter.
We will be in the fourth quarter come Oct. 20, 21. So we may need to keep an eye on his contributions. We may need to change the script to say something like received more donations from military personnel in the last two quarters (hopefully), or God forbid, take it out or switch it up somehow.
Everything else could stay the same.
What if I just keep you posted until I learn more?
mport1
08-03-2007, 05:20 PM
That is an awesome ad. I've been dying to hear it all day, but I've been at work.
Joe Knows
08-03-2007, 05:52 PM
I kinda like yours.
I’m in Florida.
The only thing that really would need to be changed is two things.
First it looks like that there is going to be a big Republican shin-dig on Oct.20th and 21st. here in Florida.
This from the Florida GOP web site…
Presidency IV (which is what they are calling the event) will provide opportunities for Florida’s grassroots volunteers to meet with state and local Republican Party leadership, elected officials, other Republicans from throughout the state, and the major Republican Presidential Candidates. Presidency IV will culminate with a live, prime time Presidential Candidate debate broadcast by Fox News Network.
It doesn’t say anything about a straw poll. But I’ve read on a few other web pages where they said that they were thinking about having one, and I can’t imagine that they wouldn’t have one seeing as how this is a huge two day event.
So if they are going to have one, then the part of the script that references the Ames Straw poll would have to reference this event instead. This event is to be held in Orlando, FL.
Second, your script mentions Paul as receiving more donations from military personnel in the last quarter.
We will be in the fourth quarter come Oct. 20, 21. So we may need to keep an eye on his contributions. We may need to change the script to say something like received more donations from military personnel in the last two quarters (hopefully), or God forbid, take it out or switch it up somehow.
Everything else could stay the same.
What if I just keep you posted until I learn more?
I will be going to Presidency IV as an ambassador. They have already announced there will be no straw poll. The people in charge are afraid that their candidate cannot compete. We are thinking about getting vendor space and doing an unofficial straw poll, but we will see what happens closer to October.
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